After showing our original script and receiving feedback off pupils and teachers we realized the script is far too short for the length needed in the opening. Because of this reason we needed to create a new script that the news reporter can read. We tried to avoid changing the original script too much as after feedback they said it was good just too short so we based our new script around the old one. To create a realistic script we viewed various clips of news reports on YouTube, we did this so that we had a better understanding of the structure of a news report. some of the clips we viewed are listed below. We were also told to add stage directions to our script so that the actor is able to more quickly take the role of the character and so that the actor is completely understanding of what they need to do. We watched all types of news reports not only murder or missing victims to get a wider understanding of all types of news reports and the structure used.
A news report made for a film. 'Dawn of the Dead' (2004)
We chose to base our script for the news reporter on this clip as this was taken from a horror genre movie. This news report adds fear to the audience through the way it appears so realistic. It shows that we need to add clips in the back group for example CCTV footage and interviews with various people that could be potential witnesses. The way the news reporter is dressed in this clip is what we will need to base our character on, it will be a male as this is stereotypical and will be dressed in a suit preferably with glasses as this signifies intelligence.
After feedback we realized we need our script for the news reporter to last a minute and a half. I searched the Internet to find a murder news report that lasted a minute and a half and looked to see what is mentioned and the structure of the first minute and a half so i can apply this to my opening.
Script of clip
Reporter one
Ideas
I'm ..... Live at the .... studios
where we have word out of a questionable death
.... is live on the scene .... what do you have for us
Reporter 2
Just a few minutes ago we believe we may have seen around one o'clock in the afternoon the suspect in the death of ...... running through this area of ....... at one point the witnesses said they saw him running in this field wearing nothing but ............ were going to show you some dramatic video captured by a bystander who happened to get this on tape just as it was happening he apparently crossed the street under this .......
More information on location and various details of suspect.
From analysing the structure used in the first 1:30 of a murder mystery news report we were now able to base our own script for our news reporter on this one.
First Initial Script
NEWS REPORTER: Breaking news! Another body has just been found dismembered in the Chelmsford region in Essex. The body was found in Highlands park, the famous location of the V Festival, at 11pm last night. Witnesses believe they saw a man approximately 6ft tall wearing a mask escaping the area, police suspicions leads to believe this could be another attack from the 'masked killer'.
We will still stick to the bases of this script as we feel it is realistic and this is how we want our script to be we want to feel as if this news report is real to add a more scary atmosphere we need to use verisimilitude.
Second Initial script
(News Reporter: shuffling papers)
Hello Glen Harries here live at the studio. First tonight David Cameron new plans to cut even more resources in the education system.. *what's that?*
BREAKING NEWS! We have just received word of a repulsive revolting and repugnant murder.
A young girls body, believed to be the body of Kristen Blackley only 17 years, from Chelmsford, Essex has been found in highlands park, the famous location of the V festival at approximately 11pm last night. Witnesses believe to have seen a man in the region of 6ft tall wearing a mysterious mask escaping the area. Police suspicions leads to believe this could be another brutal attack from the notorious Ransom Ripper.
Descriptions of the attack were not enough to convict anyone at this moment in time. Police are looking at CCTV cameras around 11pm (the time of the murder) and are looking for any suspicious behaviour. This is the 3rd attack in the last month that has occurred in this specific area with all bodies found viciously assaulted. All deaths are pointed to the unidentified 'masked man' and police are currently searching for any form of evidence.
Due to this London road is currently closed from public use. Police are searching for more witness statements to gather all information to prevent any more aggressive encounters. If anyone has any information, no matter how small about these violent attacks please don't hesitate to contact the police on 0800 321123 , that's 0800 321123 or e-mail at chelmsfordpolice@essex.org . Any questions on today's report please call 0800928928 all information disclosed will be kept unknown.
I feel this script is effective, it is realistic and has a clear threatening tone which is what is needed for out film opening. We need the audience to believe this is as if its a real news report so that an eerie scary wondering and frightful atmosphere is created and from the start the 'masked man' is feared.
By Alex Cockburn
Jess Wilding
Kat Ransom